Storyboard Editing ROUGH ROUGH ROUGH

This is the very beginning steps of my editing of part 2 :D

I'm using Revolutionary Girl Utena soundtracks, Final Fantasy X soundtracks, Justin Bieber's "Baby"and some royalty free music for my part :P I'll add in other soundtracks later

This is the very rough stages, so the sound and editing choices are still flexible.

Voices:

Catherine: Lauren

Sampson + Mr. Wong: Brett

Customer: Keith

Justin Bieber: Jess

Script Part 2

 I still need to edit the lines, but here's what I've got so far...

DIALOGUE                                                                           SFX

0.     K- What is this? This isn’t fixed!

1.     S- I I I I can fix this Katherine!!

2.     (S attempt to fix the nacho machine)                           Mechanical screwing

3.     (S still attempting)

4.     same

5.     (Nacho getting larger)                                                          Bubbling

6.     (Nacho machine exploded and Katherine is displeased)
S- Ack!

7.     (Pans into / zoom in into the convenient store)

8.     still panning

9.     (Nacho landed on floor)                                                     Splat

10.  (Nacho looks both sides)                                                 cutesy “phew”s?

11.  (Nacho begins to move)                                                   cutesy “phew” SLO-MO

12.  (Cheese on donuts)

13.  (Donut monster)                                                            monster noises

14.  (Cheese on Chikn’ bits)

15.  (Chikn’ bits monsters)                                                  monster noises

16.  CUSTOMER – Excuse me sir..

17.  CUSTOMER– I want a refund b/c this twinkie tries to eat me..     monster noises

18.  (Twinkie jumps)
CUSTOMER – Ah..! (soft feint)                                jumping noises

19.  MR. WONG – Ah!                                              Splat (landing on desk)

20.  TWINKIE- RAWRKJSDFL                                       monster noises

21.  MR. WONG- Ugh, this creature?!

22.  MR. WONG – Okay, okay, here                               tap tap tap

23.  MR. WONG – Here’s your refund
CUSTOMER- Today is my lucky day!

24.  JB – Hmm..

25.  JB- What should I get… *Baby music starts*          “baby baby baby oh~”

26.  (Monster appears)                                       monster noises

27.  JB- baby baby baby~~                              monster noises

28.  JB – OW!

29.  (Cheese on sandwiches)

30.  (Monster sandwiches)                                  monster noises

31.  (Cheese on Red Bulls)

32.  (Monster Red Bulls)                                              monster noises

33.  S + K – was that Justin Bieber?

34.  (S + K looks back)

35.  Cheese monsters in store                                        monster noises

36.  S + K – uh…

37.  S- AAHH! WE’RE GONNA DIEEE!!
K- watch it four eyes!

38.  S- As long as we have each otherrr…

39.  K- That’s gross Four eyes!
S- But I really do think so ß Optional

40.  K- Huh?

41.  K- What’s this…(Pans down her leg)

42.  (Pans down to monster)                          monster noises

43.  K- Gasp!

44.  K- Get this thing off of me!                          WACK

45.  K – Watch out behind you!
S- what? (gasp)                                     monster noises

46.  S- Oh man.. Oh!

47.  S- Aha! With this fearsome weapon, I’m…            heroic SFX

48.  S- invincible?                                 Wack + Monster noises

49.   K- Move aside Four eyes!                                Wack!

50.  K- You just hit okay? You don’t have to give a speech..
S- Oh okay…

51.  (Change scenes – birds eye view of monster)             monster noises

52.  (monster gets squished)                               SPLAT

53.  MR. WONG- what’s with all these.. cheese monsters? (Grunts)   monster noises

54.  (Sandwich monster jumps at him)
MR. WONG – Ah!                                    Monster noises

55.  MR. WONG – Sampson should really clean these up!       Monster noises

56.  MR. WONG- What’s that?                      S + K in BG + WACK

57.  S + K hitting and yelling at monsters                    WACK

58.  Nacho Cheese monster emerges                low monster noises + Eerie SFX

59.  MR. WONG- Gasp!

60.  MR. WONG – Get back in there cheese! It’s costing me a lot!    SQUEEK SQUEEK

61.  MR. WONG- Ack! (as he gets slaps)                HMPH from monster

62.  NCM- “RAWRR”

63.  MR. WONG “AH”

64.  MR. WONG – UH! ACKS!

65.  MR. WONG- UHHHNN

66.  MR. WONG – Too much cheese…

67.  NCM- “rwarrr..” (Low sounding)
S + K – huh?

68.  S + K – gasp!

69.  S- We’re gonna die! We’re really gonna die this time!

70.  S- Ahh! Huh?

71.  S- Aha! Fear this MONSTER!!                     SPRAY SFX

72.  (Pans out )                                           SPRAY SFX

73.  S + K – gasp!                                 SPRAY SFX + Growing noises

74.  NCM smirks and S + K panics
S- uh..
K- This is all your fault Four eyes!

75.  NCM – HEH HEH HEH in low menacing way                 eerie SFX

76.  S- I think..

77.  NCM – RAWR           

78.  S- WE’RE GONNA DIE! AAHH!
K- gasps

79.  Dark Abyss                                              CHOMP

Voices:
Sampson - Brett
Katherine - Lauren
Customer (william shanter[sp]) - Keith
Mr. Wong - Alan
Justin Bieber - Jessica

Part 1 Script

Part 1

-Sampson stocking selves, Customer walks up-

LADY GAGA- “Excuse me, where are the PA PA POTATO CHIPS PA POTATO CHIPS!? NA NA NA NA”

SAM: “Umm... uhh, a-aisle four i think”

LADY GAGA: “Thanks.”

-lady gaga leave/kathryn behind lady gaga-

KAT: “Sup four-eyes?” -“so I need some help with-....” starts to trail off-

SAM: “Kathryyyynnnnnnnn”

-Kat snaps fingers-

KAT: “Helloooooo?”

-Kat groans and rolls eyes-

SAM:“Whatever geek, i’ll get someone else to help me.”

-Kat grumbles and walks away-
-Sampson quivering with joy-

SAM: “she’s so niiiiiiice”

-manager standing behind sampson-

MR.WONG: “Sampson!”

SAM: “uhhhhh......”

MR.WONG:“Aren't you supposed to be stocking shelves?”

SAM: “Y-yes sir! J-j-just finished sir!”

-sam pause/ nervous laugh-

MR.WONG: “Good! Because the Nacho Machine needs more cheese. Go to the back and get some. And when you’re done with that you can do bathrooms.”

-sampson in complete horror”

SAM: “BATHROOMS!?”

-montage of bathroom scenes-

SAM: “Y-yes sir! R-r-right away sir!”

-looking over products-

SAM: “I know it’s...somewhere around here... uhh- Oh!”

-looks over can-

SAM: “Huh?”

Sampson frantic

SAM: “Mr. Wong! I-I found the cheese but it’s really old!”

MR.WONG: “Hmmmm....What are you talking about cheese gets better with age! Go restock and stop slacking!”

-Sampson worried, sees kathryn-

SAM: “O-o-oh! Hi Kathryne! Sorry, that was taking so long but I got the cheese!”

KAT: “What the hell ever geek I just fix it.”

-long pause-

SAM: “Umm, are you sure you don’t want...umm....gum or something?”

KAT: “Don’t you think that if I wanted gum I would wait around for you?”

SAM: “Oh umm....One second....”

-nervous laughter-
-kat sighs/taps foot-

SAM: “T-there that should do it! All fixed!”








VOICES:
SAMPSON:
KAT: LAUREN
MRWONG: FRIEND
BIEBER: JESSICCA
LADY GAGA: LAUREN
MONSTERS: PAUL
WILIAM CUSTOMER: KENITH
BRETT

Mr. Wong Struggling

This is basically the compilation of the second version of the previous post with something extra. For the actual animatics, I was thinking of using this and truck from right to left :DD

and then after this panel, comes this one below.

angle-wise, i prefer this one rather than my previous one.

Or we can have this alternative:

whatcha guys think? :DD

OK, time to think of some brilliant scripts for our project @__@

Final revisions?

Hey guys! Here are the final revisions of the boards.

1) Bieber getting swallowed.

the last panel is kinda iffy. Let me know if you guys find something not fitting so i can fix them over break? :)

2) Mr. Wong getting swallowed after getting bitch-slapped from the nacho cheese monster.

Version uno: straight-forward shot

Version two: more shots and more dynamic angles (you know i love dynamic angles!)

3) Monster smirking at Sampson and Katherine / Catherine

Version One: Straight-forward smirk

Version Dos: more angles! :D

and it ends liek this:

and then the blank page :)

So here's my revision, what do you guys think?

Have a fabulous spring break btw you two! (and whoever is reading this blog)

Peace!

Notes - 3/9

Lauren:

• Staging when Sampson is stocking shelves:
• Looking down backlit aisle
• Introduce Sampson in silhouette
• When Sampson is putting cheese in the machine - give him rubber gloves
• Add close-up of cheese coming out of the can

Jessica:

• Show Justin Bieber getting eaten by blob after "Oh baby!" scene

Angela:

• Push height relationship between Sampson and Catherine
• Size relationship - not so even
• Sampson should be proactive one - switch Catherine and Sampson on eating cheese
• 3 registers on the last panel

Updates~

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Justin Bieber part and then